PHOTO PROMPT © Liz Young
When Mama shuts the door, I slump down in the corner of the tiny space and pull my knees to my chest. It ain’t cold. I just don’t like the dark, and the slit under the door barely helps. I sure can hear, though.
Daddy’s yellin’ and Mama’s whimperin’. It happens ‘bout every other day.
Then Mama starts screamin’ and shivers run up and down my body. She screams for a while, then it goes real silent. I’m afraid to get up, so I hold real still for what seems like hours.
When the door finally opens, it ain’t Mama comin’ to fetch me.
Friday Fictioneers is a weekly flash fiction prompt where we are given a photo and asked to write a 100 word story – beginning, middle and end. This one came in at 104 words.
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You spelled it out well, Helen. You captured the kid’s fears in a subtle way.
Nice take on the prompt this week!
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Thank you very much!
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That was good. It totally held my attention wondering what was going to happen.
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Thank you!
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This gave me the creeps. So well described and I am in pain for the child…
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That photo gave me the creeps! Lol. Thanks, I was sad for the child too.
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Well written,I was scared for her at the end.
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Thank you very much.
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Very chilling evocative. I could feel her pain.
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Thank you. It’s a painfully sad story.
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Our stories run on similar lines…… you got into the mind of the child very well.
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Thank you!
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A well told story, though very sad. This picture seems to have really inspired stories of abuse.
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Thank you. At first I was thinking it could be sci-fi, but that’s not really my genre. 😊
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Great voice for the narrator and a well written story. Well done 😀
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Thank you very much!
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Very atmospheric and you captured the child’s voice well.
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Thank you very much!
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Nicely told.
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Thank you!
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Poor kid – too many live through similar scenarios.
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I agree. It’s so sad.
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The child’s perspective is perfect. She lives from one moment of fear to the next. You describe her complete lack of power so well.
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Oh, thank you!
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This gave me shivers Helen!
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I blame the picture. 😉
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Powerful piece of writing, Helen! The scene is so viscerally scary and sharp.
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Thank you!
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